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You are the only person that can make
smoking seem attractive, the way you sit
there on the floor with your legs crossed
blowing smoke into stale air, it's entrancing.
I can't help but be engulfed in the movements
of your body. The way your arm twitches slightly
when you bring the sickness to your lips.
It's a dirty, disgusting habit, yet I sit back
and wonder, if I took up smoking, would I look
even half as beautiful as you do?
smoking seem attractive, the way you sit
there on the floor with your legs crossed
blowing smoke into stale air, it's entrancing.
I can't help but be engulfed in the movements
of your body. The way your arm twitches slightly
when you bring the sickness to your lips.
It's a dirty, disgusting habit, yet I sit back
and wonder, if I took up smoking, would I look
even half as beautiful as you do?
Meh, it's whatever.
© 2013 - 2024 livesofbirds
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I love the lines:
The way your arm twitches slightly
when you bring the sickness to your lips.
I like how you've centered the poem around one action, one scene, and its intimacy. It feels very quiet and enclosed, and I like that about it.
Keep writing!
The way your arm twitches slightly
when you bring the sickness to your lips.
I like how you've centered the poem around one action, one scene, and its intimacy. It feels very quiet and enclosed, and I like that about it.
Keep writing!